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Post by AlixRobinson on 22nd July 2010, 4:45 am

. : oo1 . Blood : .

Tobey had never seen so much blood.

Under ordinary circumstances, it probably wouldn’t have bothered him so much. He’d yell for help, he might have even tried giving assistance himself.

But this time…

Well, he couldn’t even move.

Instead, the people around him rushed around, screaming. Well-dressed students shouted and pushed each other out of the doors of the gymnasium, hoping to escape the destruction and carnage. Three other teenagers, decked out in two pretty dresses and one very expensive tux, ran towards the source of the blood as fast as they could – trying to get it to stop, trying to wake the girl it was coming from.

Trying with all their might to save the fragile life slipping away from them.

But Tobey couldn’t move.

He couldn’t breathe.

He couldn’t even remember his own name.

The small girl, under five feet tall, was lying broken on the wooden gymnasium floor. Her arms and legs were spread sporadically around her tiny body. Blood poured from every orifice of her face and torso, soaking the white dress she wore, turning it an ugly shade of scarlet.

Tobey took an awkward step backwards. He landed on the side of his foot, and he fell to the ground. He slid himself backwards as fast as possible, scrambling for grip.

Away from the best friend he was too scared to help.

Away from the girl he would never see smile again.

Away from the blood.

v-v-v-v-v-v

Thalia should already be aware of this scene, as it's from Tyko's fanfic.


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Re: oo1. Blood

Post by WolfieStar on 22nd July 2010, 4:48 am

...whoa...very nicely written....

Star feels out of the loop...
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Post by AlixRobinson on 22nd July 2010, 4:52 am

Don't feel out of the loop, haha. There's not really a loop to be feeling out of.

Glad you liked it :D


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Post by WolfieStar on 22nd July 2010, 4:55 am

Lol so your making Tyko's story too? XD First Brynn, then Gary, now Tyko...
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Post by swim2live on 22nd July 2010, 5:08 am

that was so good! i loved the closing lines!
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Post by AlixRobinson on 22nd July 2010, 5:11 am

I've been working on Tyko's story for over two years now. I'm having issues with it.


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Post by AlixRobinson on 22nd July 2010, 5:11 am

So glad you like it!
I tend to make my closing lines ominous.


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Post by WolfieStar on 22nd July 2010, 5:12 am

Ah, i see, i see.

lol ominunous (sp?) lines are epic
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Post by swim2live on 22nd July 2010, 5:13 am

i love having ominous endings almost as much as i love reading them! Brava, Alix!
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Post by WolfieStar on 22nd July 2010, 5:13 am

YUS
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Post by AlixRobinson on 22nd July 2010, 5:17 am

Aw, thanks guys <3


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Post by ThaliaAnderson on 22nd July 2010, 6:57 am

It's only ominous if you don't know what'll happen. >D

Aw, geez, admittedly, I do know about this, and I don't know why but I never imagined it so.. so... disturbing. D: Probably because I don't like to think of it at all; because I don't know how it could ever be not disturbing.

I think you should just assume that I am getting goosebumps from all these. It's probably boring for you to read from me that I love your distraught horrific scenes to death (pun? *shot*). XD


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Post by ThaliaAnderson on 22nd July 2010, 6:58 am

Oh, and Alix and I are in a loop of our own.

...Except that it's more like a line segment.
Two points connecting each other.
You know.


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Post by AlixRobinson on 22nd July 2010, 7:23 am

IT IS NOT BORING AT ALL.
I LOVE YOUR COMMENTS.
I PRINT THEM ALL OUT AND TAPE THEM ONTO THE CREEPY SHRINE I HAVE IN THE BACK OF MY CLOSET.

And that thing about the line segment made me giggle xD


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Post by ThaliaAnderson on 22nd July 2010, 10:22 am

ORLY?
WELL THEN.
I'VE BEEN IN YOUR CLOSET.
IS IT LIKE JARED'S AND IT HAS A SECRET PULLEY SWITCH THAT ACTIVATES THE SHRINE?


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Post by AlixRobinson on 22nd July 2010, 9:54 pm

AGH YOU KNOW MY SECRET.


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Post by ThaliaAnderson on 23rd July 2010, 2:42 am

YESSSSSSS.


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Post by DragonWarriorClaire34 on 25th July 2010, 4:25 pm

I liked this story. That sounds so sadistic of me, but I really liked how it was written Alix. Everything was described so well, and I loved the part about Tyko's description. Her dress, the way she was sprawled on the gym floor. Weird of me, yes, but I still really enjoyed reading this! XD
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Post by AlixRobinson on 7th August 2010, 8:21 pm

(Weird, I just noticed your comment xD)

Thank you very much! I try to put as many... frightening details into my little drabbles as possible. I'm so glad you liked what I put in!

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