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Rina's a good friend Part 1

Post by swim2live on 16th July 2010, 4:46 am

ok im not finished with this one but im gonna post what i have. this is before Kelsi Ross and Rush come to Chinatown. its about Tobey and Rina. im not insinuating that they should go out, i just thought this would be pretty funny. btw i wrote a little blurb a long time sgo where Rina and Tobey acidentally kissed so if u see anything u dont understand, that's where its from
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"No. Nuh-uh. No way. Absolutely not. Never in a million years. When pigs fly. Negatory. Nay. Heck no!" Rina said, still thinking of more ways to say "no".

"C'mon, Rina," Tobey pleaded, "You'd be perfect! You're hot, smart, cool....hot!" Tobey got on his hands and knees and began kissing Rina's feet.

"Tobey, stop it! You're making a fool out of yourself!" Rina exclaimed, slightly kicking her feet to get Tobey away. He was getting so pathetic!

"Please, please, please, Rina! Please!" Tobey stayed on his knees and continued to beg.

"No, Tobey! Go ask Sue." Rina said, crossing her arms and turning away from Tobey.

"Sue would never agreeeee! Especially since she accidentally ate one of my petrified dumplings."

"That was me! If anything YOU owe ME!" Rina was not going to give in to Tobey's ridiculous demands.

"That's not true! I've saved you before."

"Name one time!" said Rina, holding up her index finger.

Tobey thought for a moment. "There was that...one...time..."

"See? You owe me."

"Why won't you just do me a favor for once?!" Tobey was acting like a child: foot stamping, begging, the whole deal.

"Because, one: I'd never REALLY date you. And, two: I see no personal gain or reason I should pretend to date you for....how long?"

"Two weeks."

Rina shuddered, "Forget it."

"Pleeeease!"

"No!"

"Please!"

"No!"

"Please!" Tobey started pouting and doing his puppy dog look. He was already a cute guy but the "Look" was getting harder for Rina to deny.

"No." said Rina meekly, always a sucker for her friends.

"Please! I'll do your deliveries for a month!"

How could Rina pass up THAT offer? She sighed and said, "Fine."

"Yay! Rina, you're the best!" Tobey said, giving her a tight hug.

Rina didn't hug back, "I know I'm going to regret this." she said, rolling her eyes.
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Re: Rina's a good friend Part 1

Post by Chezberryz456 on 16th July 2010, 10:18 pm

Wow! Thats good!
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Re: Rina's a good friend Part 1

Post by swim2live on 16th July 2010, 11:18 pm

thank you! ^_^ i have more to come
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Re: Rina's a good friend Part 1

Post by ThaliaAnderson on 16th July 2010, 11:31 pm

Your writing has gotten a lot better since the last time I saw it. (: It's always great to see improvement! It flows very well, and it's very natural. Great work. (:

I am curious to know why Tobey needs a fake girlfriend, but I guess I'll have to wait for the rest of the story. XD


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Re: Rina's a good friend Part 1

Post by swim2live on 16th July 2010, 11:36 pm

i only vaguely touch on it later on. its just kinda a guy thing.

im glad someone notices improvement! ive kinda noticed it myself.
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