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Wounded Fox (The Pain)

Post by swim2live on 17th July 2010, 3:39 am

okay we always assumed it was Brynn who beat Rina to Sid but there was never a story about the day Rina realized it.....till now
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All of the teens were gathered at Wu's just hanging out. Rina kept her eyes on Brynn and Sid. The were talking and laughing. Flirting. Another word that came to Rina's mind. Everyone else was wrapped up in their own affairs and chores, not noticing the two teens. Not noticing the wounded fox.

Then the pair scooted closer together, almost touching. Raven mixing with cherry. Two beautiful colors, invincibly blended together.

The pain. Rina thought. The pain that came along with losing every good thing that happened to her: her parents, the other Mews, her life in Tokyo, and now Sid. The pain. Suddenly, Rina felt ashamed. How could she be so selfish? She was surrounded by people who love and care about her. They took her in and gave her a home when she had none. They still took care of her like family and loved her despite her many flaws. She should stop wallowing in self pity.

But that still didn’t stop the pain. Rina touched the pendent on her neck, the only item that gave her comfort. It didn’t help. Rina couldn’t look away from the two teens. The way you can’t look away from something you don’t want to believe. You blink and blink and hope it isn’t true, hoping your eyes are deceiving you. Inevitably, you must look away, not wanting to prolong the suffering. Rina looked away, eyes full of tears.

Kyoki reacted immediately to the change in Rina’s feelings. She shot up from a nearby booth, grabbed Rina’s arm and dragged her away from the heart-wrenching sight.
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i just realized its really short Embarassed Embarassed Embarassed
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Re: Wounded Fox (The Pain)

Post by swim2live on 20th July 2010, 4:27 am

im surprised no one has commented on this yet.....FAIL!!!
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Re: Wounded Fox (The Pain)

Post by WolfieStar on 20th July 2010, 5:03 am

I'm so sorry. This really is good, I can tell alot about Rina.
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Post by swim2live on 20th July 2010, 6:42 pm

thank you! its one of my better stories....made up on the spot of course XD
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Re: Wounded Fox (The Pain)

Post by ThaliaAnderson on 21st July 2010, 12:33 am

I would just like you to know that Brynn apologizes for the grief that she has caused Rina. ;~;

This was really well-written. And yes, in my opinion, it's your best. (: You're really good a depicting emotional pain and how something can effect a character (though I'm sorry about the reason for her pain ;~; ). It's really great.
I'm glad Kyoki was there to make it a bit better. (: Brynn will make you a cake later on. I promise!


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Re: Wounded Fox (The Pain)

Post by swim2live on 21st July 2010, 1:16 am

YAY! CAKE! i like writing about emotional pain because you can really go all out with it. Stop apologizing, Thalia! It's okay! Rina still loves Brynn! Although she would like a cake >w<
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Re: Wounded Fox (The Pain)

Post by Chezberryz456 on 27th July 2010, 5:21 pm

Wow! that was really good! You're really good at writing emotional sences.
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Re: Wounded Fox (The Pain)

Post by swim2live on 30th July 2010, 7:36 pm

thank you very much!
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Re: Wounded Fox (The Pain)

Post by DragonWarriorClaire34 on 4th August 2010, 3:36 am

PLEASE WRITE MORE! OR ACTUALLY, WE CAN COLLAB!

I'LL BE KYOKI!!!! XD Unless you don't want to, but please write more about this, I love it. It's just like that fanfic I made/sent to you, but didn't finish.

That's when Kyoki was trying to cheer her up! XD
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Re: Wounded Fox (The Pain)

Post by swim2live on 5th August 2010, 1:37 am

OH! This could be the intro to your story? That'd be cool. Yes....I like that idea very much!!!!
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Re: Wounded Fox (The Pain)

Post by DragonWarriorClaire34 on 5th August 2010, 1:40 am

No, thank YOU! XD
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Post by DragonWarriorClaire34 on 5th August 2010, 1:41 am

Oh, we can still collab though, because I haven't gotten that far since last time I sent a copy to you....in fact, I haven't done anything to it recently... I'll post it up!

But one problem...what will the title be if I post it? XD

*facepalms* Ok, it will be the title of this topic. I just looked and remembered... XD
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Post by swim2live on 5th August 2010, 5:07 am

haha okay. im writing a Rush story also soooo......whose are we gonna use?
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Re: Wounded Fox (The Pain)

Post by DragonWarriorClaire34 on 5th August 2010, 5:19 am

We can collab and look at both, taking elements from both. My story can be the summer before school, yours is in school, we can start from the summer! XD
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Post by swim2live on 5th August 2010, 5:23 am

okay cool. that sounds like a plan. im not fully done writing mine either so we can freestyle it once we get to the unwritten part
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Post by DragonWarriorClaire34 on 5th August 2010, 5:32 am

Nice. XD
I haven't really finished my story of the summer (when Kyoki takes Rina back to Japan. With others?!)
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Re: Wounded Fox (The Pain)

Post by swim2live on 5th August 2010, 5:34 am

There's more to it?? I thought Kyo was just taking her there and met Rush and blah blah blah
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Post by DragonWarriorClaire34 on 5th August 2010, 5:38 am

....they do fun stuff like karaoke. XD *shot*
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Post by swim2live on 5th August 2010, 5:41 am

YUS!! Bonus points to the max, Claire. We have to do a serious collaboration cuz u have good ideas and so do i! I cant wait to see the finished product!!
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Post by DragonWarriorClaire34 on 5th August 2010, 5:42 am

YUS! XD
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